Monday, 27 November 2017

A&P work

This is my A & P Show work that I did. These are all the activities I did Recount,Animals,Market campaign,Ride design,Photo book,History & food truck. I hope You like my work can I please have feedback. WE had 3 days to do this I hope you enjoy

Tuesday, 7 November 2017


This week we had to write a story based on this video. First we watched a bit of this video then we talked about what we saw felt and wondered and we also talked about the character and the old rusty yellow plane.

After that we planned it on a planning sheet.

This is my story, can I please have some feedback on how I did writing my story.

Name     LAUREN                                                                 Peer Marker: Parwin
Success Criteria - Narrative
Features of Text
  • I have included a beginning, middle and an end.

  • I have created a setting by showing with my words or using who, what, when & where.

  • I have included a problem & solved it (or created good tension)

  • I have written a satisfying ending.

  • I have written in either 1st person or 3rd person.

  • I have used descriptive language throughout  (sets of 3, alliteration, similes, personification, metaphors) and provided detail to my story.

  • I have used a range sequencing connectives. (time words or phrases)

My Personal Target/s:

What I think I did well:  Was descriptive words
What my partner thinks I’ve done well: You have used a lot of descriptive words.
What I think I need to improve next time: I don't know
What my partner thinks I need to improve next time: Maybe next time you could use more time words.

Once upon a time a harbor was whole with water as clear as diamonds dancing in a hole. Where the waves once lapped up strongly against the vessels making them tremble in their wake.

While everyone was at sea the rainbow boats were smiling at me until one day when the mighty desert wind came up in gusts roaring like a wild beast tangled up in nets then it started throwing up all the sea until there was no more water to be seen.

A small girl at the age of 11 crawled out of a boat wreck surprisingly alive. As she saw the wreck of her father's boat she suddenly started to lose hope. Crying she fled into her house. As quiet as a mouse she found her father's old plane and flew it into the wild blue yonder.

Then a lighthouse started to shine but how and why is it shining then she sees a cloud as light as an angel shining so bright she suddenly started to tumble out of sight down down the girl fell falling right into a well. The dried up well helped her hatch a plan to make a rain machine. So she made a machine and it rained. After it rained she found her family

The end

Friday, 20 October 2017

Uru manuka logo design

This is my slide show of logos that I made for uru manuka because we had to design a logo to put in the competition .My favorite is the first one please leave some feedback? What one is your favorite?

Wednesday, 27 September 2017

How to add fractions with unlike denominators

Hello viewers of my blog how is your day going?
Today I am back with another D.L.O if you don't know what that is it is a Digital Learning object that teaches others about what you have been learning. Ok so that's enough on what it is so here's my introduction to why I made this D.L.O.
I made this D.L.O because we are learning to add and subtract fractions with unlike denominators we have been doing this topic for a few weeks now. Here's what we have done this week.
This is the link to my D.L.O    I really enjoyed making this D.L.O because it is colourful and eye catching. I would rate 7/10 because I got a bit muddled up in the middle.
Thanks for watching my D.L.O and I hope you learned something
Please leave feedback about it πŸ˜ƒπŸ˜ƒ

Monday, 11 September 2017

Ouucchhh !!!

On Wednesday night at gym training I Injured (Broke) my toe. It was really sore I'm a bit worried it won't heal for when I go to nationals for gym and I hope it does heal soon.  πŸ˜­ πŸ˜­

Wednesday, 6 September 2017

My Blog Profile


Today we went to the Student summit toolkits to learn how to use different tools on our chromebooks like Soundtrap,Voki,Screencastify,Google sites & even more we got to choose what Toolkits we went to I choose Voki use your voice Here's my Voki and Blogger how to write Great posts I really liked blogger because we made blog profiles on piktochart and I really enjoyed that I also posted my profile. My group are doing how to make a quality screencastify DLO Here's our presentation.