Monday, 22 August 2016
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Hi I am Reagan from Awahono School. I like how you ended your story and started it. One thing you could do is add some more detail to the story.
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ReplyDeleteI am Julia from Yaldhurst Model School. I like how in your story there were doughnuts that the pink puppy shares. Your writing font and size was awesome. Something I noticed is that you put your last name in the cover which I thought was a bad idea but apart from that spectacular post. Also what would happen if the puppy was a sad puppy. Can’t wait for your next post bye!
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ReplyDeleteHi Lauren, my name is Lauren from St. Bernadette's School. I really liked pinky the pink puppy. I especially like Laura the cat fairy. Maybe next time put more detail and colour into it because it is a little plain. I think that the idea of donuts was really smart.
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